Friday, August 16, 2013

Tree Party

One year in one image

Leaf-green spring party gowns, flower-trimmed.

Cultivated summer dance attire.

Autumn attends, a rogue.

Spills red and orange.

Stained frocks, cast aside, reveal winter-white slips.

(Or nothing!)

Trees shiver, wait.

For next year’s invitation.

 

 

http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2013/08/trifextra-week-eighty-one.html

43 comments:

  1. Awesome! I really enjoyed this. Great metaphor that carried all the way through.

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    1. Thank you so much, Alicia! I appreciate that!

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  2. I love the line "spills red and orange" stained frocks. This is lovely.

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    1. Thanks so much, Donetta! I'm glad you liked that line-I wanted to convey that autumn is a party crasher;)

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  3. I like the idea of trees shivering and waiting for next year's invitation...just like we wait for the first signs of spring!

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    1. Janna-me too! I love seeing the trees leaf out again each year! Thanks so much for reading!

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  4. Beautiful! I love the autumn rogue line.

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  5. Thank you so much Lisa! And I'll be by your blog soon-I took an unplanned break this past week, but I missed everyone so much:)

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  6. Perhaps my mind wandered in the wrong direction, but I certainly was in the mind set of the 'trees' stripping.

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  7. Renada, Lots of bare limbs in this one-that autumn really is such a rogue;)

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  8. Quite a picture of nature you have created...very alive...the shivering trees know what to expect but still are full of wonder...waiting for a new surprise.

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    1. Thanks Ese! I tried to have fun with this one-and I'm so glad you stopped by to read it!

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  9. Those exhibitionist trees, always baring themselves in winter!

    You've done it again, made me smile and my heart just prance around happily. Well done, Ms. Valerie! :))

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    1. Your comment makes me smile, my friend! I can't thank you enough!

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  10. What a beautiful picture your words again paint Valerie! I can't express enough how much I'm looking forward to fall!

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    1. Thank you so much, dear Jess! I'm looking forward to fall too. I love everything about it:) xx

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  11. Valerie,

    I love, love, love this! I read it three times, in fact. :)

    I adore the way you personified the trees. I imagined them dancing and swaying in their gowns. This has the makings of a lovely children's story.

    Such a unique and gorgeous take on the prompt. Well done ... again!

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    1. Ivy, a million thanks! I don't think I can ever say how much I appreciate your wonderful words-but I sure do! Thank you, thank you, thank you, my friend!! :)

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  12. Bravo! Valerie, you have me shivering too, and I'm not ready! Beautifully written as always--I come to your party to dance, and you have the best music!!!

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    1. Sweet Dawn, I'm so happy to have you come to my party:) I'm always thrilled to do likewise. Let's keep our thoughts warm and summery, and I'll be by soon! (Dolores will be joining me-she misses Frances) :)

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  13. Charming and fresh as a cold, clear winter morning!

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    1. Thank you, Linda! I love your comment and the image it brings to mind! I can almost see my breath;) Loved your piece this week, by the way!!

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  14. This was lovely, my fav line was'Spills red and orange.

    Stained frocks'

    that simply flowed!
    this was a lovely poem

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    1. Thank you so much, Glynis! Your comment is so kind:)

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  15. You gave so much grace to the prompt. Yours are always among my favorites :)

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    1. Shawn-this sums up the way I've come to feel about the addition of your work to these prompts. The community is lucky to have you:)

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  16. Now this is lovely; evoking Nature's annual, year-long ball. How beautiful!

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    1. Thank you so much, Freya! I'm so glad you liked this:)

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    1. Thanks AC! Your comments are always appreciated so much!

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  18. This is sort of whimsical, the idea of trees at a tea party. Love it.

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  19. Loved it.

    I want to go to that party.

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  20. Oh that was quite a fun ride down the seasons.

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    1. Thanks Bjorn! I'm so glad you thought this was fun too!

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  21. What a fun response! I read this two ways - literally (a girl frolicking with her lover) and metaphorically. Fantastic!

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    1. I love that you read this two ways! Clever!! Thank you so much for taking the time to do so:)

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  22. Oh wow. I definitely want an invite to this. This is gorgeous. I'd love to see this expanded or even filmed or somehow brought more to life so that we can dive in deeper. Thanks for linking up. Don't forget to come back and vote.

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    1. Thanks so much for that generous comment! I really appreciate it!! :)

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  23. This is wonderful! Very inventive and whimsical.

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  24. Very nicely said, girlfriend.

    guess-what? I'M BACK. I'M HERE. I'M BACK TO STAY.

    horray!

    Come see my Mom's cool bracelet that she wore when I was a child and yet it is right in style now.

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