I hold not dear immortal dreams. Hopes ground in promises of youth.
That love lingers, when mortal flesh and soul are parted.
Hollow sentiment.
My heart has died today, and so shall I.
Whether the actual trenches of WWI, or as a metaphor for modern life, tragedy strikes all too frequently. Heartache is heartache. That never changes.
http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2013/11/trifextra-week-ninety-two.html
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Death is the great divide. Well written. There is nothing good to say about being parted from someone who has passed.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ann! And your eloquent comment says it all.
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ReplyDeletesuch a well-written gut punch
arrgh matey, the word pirate did well
Thank you so much, Lance! That means a lot!
DeleteAnother heart-felt piece from you. That last line was an extra punch. (Nicely done!)
ReplyDeleteThanks Janna-for reading, and leaving such a wonderful comment!
DeleteBeautiful writing Valerie. Hugs B
ReplyDeleteThank you B!! Hugs:)
DeleteVery true, heartache never changes. Powerful piece, Valerie!
ReplyDeleteThanks Tammy! I appreciate that! :)
DeleteWow Valerie! This is so beautiful and so profoundly intense.
ReplyDeleteSuzanne-thank you so much!!
Delete"Heartache is heartache" - so very true Valerie. Recently, I had a classmate who was killed in a car accident (he was also the first in our class to pass away). He and his wife were only married for four years and they were trying to start a family. Even though I was not close to him in high school and did not know his wife, it was still heartbreaking to hear the news of his passing. Life can be a cruel and heartless friend sometimes.
ReplyDeleteJess-that is so sad about your classmate. It sums up how I feel about situations like that. So senseless, and it always depresses me deeply, even when I don't personally know the people involved. I ache for their families.
DeleteThank you for your thoughtful comment, my sweet friend:)
Heartbreaking and tragic. Such a beautifully written post.
ReplyDeleteThanks a million, Kelly!!
DeleteExcellent
ReplyDeleteVery much appreciated! Thank you!
DeleteHeartbreak and tragedy. Such poignant things to write about. You do them well, always.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gina! That is so kind!!
DeleteAwesome work.
ReplyDeleteThank you Draug!
DeleteGreat writing.
ReplyDeleteAs always, AC-that means so much!!
Deletelovely post!
ReplyDeleteAnd thank you for such a lovely comment, too!!
DeleteJo-Anne, I can't thank you enough for that. I need to hear that from time to time-and I'm thankful when words of encouragement come from writers I admire so much-like you!
ReplyDeleteThis made me cry. Beautiful and true. Thanks for linking up!
ReplyDeleteThank you. From the bottom of my heart, thank you.
DeleteOh. My. Wow. This is achingly sad because it's so true. Every single line is strong, heart-tugging and beautifully written. Excellent work, my dear friend. Once again, I'm in awe of your talent.
ReplyDeleteIvy, thank you. I'm overwhelmed beyond words, and feeling so lucky to be able to call you my dear friend as well. xx
DeleteThis gives the heart a good twist. It is so terribly sad, so awful to know our youth die in such conditions.
ReplyDeleteI couldn't agree more, Renada. Heart twisting is such an excellent way to describe the feeling. Thank you so much for your wonderful comment:)
DeleteJust gorgeous, Valerie.
ReplyDeleteThe whole thing speaks to me, but this:
That love lingers, when mortal flesh and soul are parted.
I never wrote that, but I could have. And wish I did. <3
Thanks, and hugs, my dear sweet friend. With all my heart:)
DeleteOh Valerie,this made me want to weep!Such profound emotions-you said so much in just 33 words-amazing!
ReplyDeleteThank you, my friend! I value that comment so much:)
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful in so few words.
ReplyDeleteThank you sweet Valerie! Life is so hard lately. Makes me sad and yet hopeful still. Hope you are doing fine? You troubled me about you now. Are you ok? Is something wrong with your family, too? Oh Oh. ♥
ReplyDeleteWell written, but sad and it hints at something else, as well. Like Renae, I hope all is well with you. I've just begun to recover from a nasty flu bug and this was after getting my flu shot:~)
ReplyDeleteTake care good care of yourself, okay?
This is beautiful and full of hope. Brilliant! ♥
ReplyDeleteThis was heat-achingly beautiful ! Amazing it made me cry.
ReplyDeleteThank you all so, so, much!! I appreciate your comments:)
ReplyDeleteVery nice...Really wonderful :)
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